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Peter G
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Need help with lyrics

Postby Peter G » Fri Jul 05, 2013 5:41 am

Hello fellow Mixcrafters :)

I am working on some lyrics but got stuck..
I'm from Sweden and my School English is not helping me out.
If anyone could help me, i would really appreciate it :)

These are the lines:
- When I touch your beauty skin,
- My love for you begin(s)

The word "begin", should i end it with "s"?

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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby trevlyns » Fri Jul 05, 2013 6:00 am

Hi Peter

Yes! The "s" will sound more correct.

The word "beauty" would be more correctly said as "beautiful" in the first line - if it will fit OK.

Hope this helps.
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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby fredfish » Fri Jul 05, 2013 6:57 am

I agree with Trevor, in addition you could also think of

When I touch your beauty
My love for you begins

If you will excuse the pun it brings a different complexion to the composition.

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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby Bucktail » Fri Jul 05, 2013 9:41 am

If you feel strongly about using the first line you could consider

- When I touch your beauty skin,
- My love for you began

"Began" sounds close enough to rhyme.

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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby Mark Bliss » Fri Jul 05, 2013 10:07 am

Another alternative:

Its when I touch your skin
My love for you begins?

Its when I touch your booty.....

No never mind! :oops:

Bucktail:
"- When I touch your beauty skin,
- My love for you began
"Began" sounds close enough to rhyme."

Especially with a little southern "twang"! :D
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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby Juno » Fri Jul 05, 2013 11:11 am

"When i touch your perfect skin
my love for you begins"

Preserves both metrum (edit: well, in English this is called "metre" or "meter") and rhyme.

But, i don't know the skin in question. Is it really perfect? Do you have a picture? :wink:
We the undersigned being of sound mind hereby do declare:
'We henceforth pledge ourselves unto the power of the Upper Air'
Doesn't that sound simply super
Zeppelin visions of the future
Of course we all know very well it wouldn't work but what the hell

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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby trevlyns » Fri Jul 05, 2013 12:32 pm

Behave yourself, Juno :mrgreen:
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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby mick » Fri Jul 05, 2013 1:22 pm

How about:
My love for you begins.
Whenever I touch your lovely skin.
Or
My love for you always begins
Each time I touch your lovely skin.

I like Mbliss's idea though!

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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby Juno » Fri Jul 05, 2013 4:58 pm

trevlyns wrote:Behave yourself, Juno :mrgreen:

:oops:

Should i go to Sweden to apologise? 8)
We the undersigned being of sound mind hereby do declare:
'We henceforth pledge ourselves unto the power of the Upper Air'
Doesn't that sound simply super
Zeppelin visions of the future
Of course we all know very well it wouldn't work but what the hell

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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby chibear » Fri Jul 05, 2013 6:01 pm

I'm still trying to find a rhyme for booty
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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby dadabujontomasteel » Fri Jul 05, 2013 6:21 pm

Our love is funky
But I lost your love
Wherever it may be,
Wherever you have left it.

That's all that I can think of right now!

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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby Peter G » Fri Jul 05, 2013 11:59 pm

Thank you so much all,

Now i got a bunch of options to choose from, you will hear the result when the song is done :)

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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby Mark Bliss » Sat Jul 06, 2013 5:26 am

chibear wrote:I'm still trying to find a rhyme for booty


I touched her booty
Now I have a husbands duty
but I never knew
she would be so moody

Theres 2! :shock:

Glad to help Peter, I look foward to the result. Might have had more to offer if we had more content/context to contemplate.
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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby songsmith1950 » Tue Jul 09, 2013 1:16 pm

Jut my own thought.

Each time I kiss your beautiful skin
my love begins again and again


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Re: Need help with lyrics

Postby Tiasdad » Wed Jul 10, 2013 3:39 am

My tuppenny worth ...

Each time I touch your beautiful skin
My mind is filled with sin.

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