How 'bout
"Every time I see your skin
Makes me wanna hit the Gin"
Need help with lyrics
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Re: Need help with lyrics
You wicked boy, Gary!
How 'bout
"Every time I see your skin
Makes me wanna hit the Gin"
How 'bout
"Every time I see your skin
Makes me wanna hit the Gin"
Old Dudes Rock!
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Trevor
OFC™ Founding Member
Dell 3050 SFF; i3; 32 gig RAM; MX 8, 9 and 10.5 Pro; Win 11 Pro
Focusrite Solo; Sennheiser HD650 cans
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Sample Projects: https://soundcloud.com/trevs_audio
Re: Need help with lyrics
OK
When I touch your beauty skin,
- My love for you begin(s)
The first line doesn't really make sense. It's not good English, it should be 'beautiful skin', or if the number of syllables needs to remain exactly the same, you should think about a different adjective other than 'beautiful' - one with 2 syllables.
'Begins' is the correct grammar but of course it doesn't rhyme exactly with 'skin', so it sounds slightly amateurish. If you omit the 's' then 'begin' will of course rhyme, but it it will sound awkward because it is not good English.
Bearing all of these points in mind, here's my suggestion:
When I touch your silky skin
My loving will begin
When I touch your beauty skin,
- My love for you begin(s)
The first line doesn't really make sense. It's not good English, it should be 'beautiful skin', or if the number of syllables needs to remain exactly the same, you should think about a different adjective other than 'beautiful' - one with 2 syllables.
'Begins' is the correct grammar but of course it doesn't rhyme exactly with 'skin', so it sounds slightly amateurish. If you omit the 's' then 'begin' will of course rhyme, but it it will sound awkward because it is not good English.
Bearing all of these points in mind, here's my suggestion:
When I touch your silky skin
My loving will begin
Re: Need help with lyrics
Bearing in mind the humour in this thread, an alternative suggestion could be:
When I touch your sexy skin
I want to slide it in
When I touch your sexy skin
I want to slide it in